Ah, pretty and thinky! I didn't expect less. Lots and lots of details in there and hints and thoughts. And as always so well-written.
Her legs being too short, the running being ludicrous, the way-too-freaking-tall alien... Perfect beginning. Which makes the rush and halt before the closed door even more striking... 'You shall not pass' indeed.
The miracle box stood so ominous. Its door shut, merciless, and she had to rush, with a sickening jolt in her chest. As she eventually entered, her lungs felt tight and the lights overhead flashed so coldly at her. She felt tiny and out of place, like her rumpled, dripping umbrella, at the entrance of a temple. This is my favourite part because you really read a sense of danger and crushing silent power emanating from the TARDIS -which I think was lacking in the Journey episode. So I'm tremendously glad you wrote it. Not only a magic box, she is something powerful, thus dangerous, we seem to forget that. It is as a mute and impossible box that the TARDIS is most threatening, not as a mystery. She is a sentient ship, an inhabited, haunted vessel, like, as you wrote, a temple. There is a presence and essence within those walls and THIS is more terrifying than zombies in corridors... Inside the TARDIS, Clara seems to feel pressed, because she is, as her umbrella, folded to fit in what is essentially another dimension. And Clara feels it because of what she is? (I want the finale now)
The wheels of fate, turning. Oh, I really like that image, especially after Journey to the Centre of the TARDIS... Something/someone is pulling the strings and the plan is huge. And Clara a wheel...
The description of the Doctor's limbs surprinsingly falling into place in the TARDIS was extremely accurate because for all his power and intelligence he still is an alien and his body language betrays him as much as his time machine.
You also encapsulated so well Clara's general reaction to the Doctor when you say 'she could have smiled' but didn't. That's what I adore about Clara, she's much, much warier of him than any companion -frankly I would be. Obviously the way he acts around her is weird and she senses it. She's right to act as if she is tested constantly; she puts on a face for him. At the end of the day, she always comes back home because she sees she doesn't belong with him - no 'but I was going to be with you forever' which is cute but a bit unrealistic considering all of them know he is an ageless alien. We discussed it before, it doesn't mean he lives his relationships in a superficial way -well, a bit, but he has to protect himself, he is no Knulp-, it is to him short, but intense.
Oh, the metaphor of the cat with time claws, delicious, absolutely. Because cats, more than any other pets, seem to tolerate us rather than live with us -'peasant, I shall share this part of my sofa only because you take so much place'. The TARDIS similarly acts with everybody including the Doctor. And I think you may just have hit the nail on the head with 'those lights flashed accusing'. The TARDIS knows who Clara is, something worse than Jack who was a walking time anomaly, yet she is not aggressive, she doesn't want to kill Clara, she seems to resent her. We'll see, soon...
Of course, smart girl, Clara would see it as jealousy on her part, she sensed how 'alive' the TARDIS is.
Loved the ending, it fell like and axe. Accused: Clara. Verdict: guilty. Sentence: Guillotine.
It was extremely insightful. I love gap-fillers and this one is really good and tickles the mind when it comes to finding who is Clara... On the threshold, between the lines, but right on the spot. It is as good as meta ;)
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Date: 2013-05-07 04:36 pm (UTC)Her legs being too short, the running being ludicrous, the way-too-freaking-tall alien... Perfect beginning. Which makes the rush and halt before the closed door even more striking... 'You shall not pass' indeed.
The miracle box stood so ominous. Its door shut, merciless, and she had to rush, with a sickening jolt in her chest. As she eventually entered, her lungs felt tight and the lights overhead flashed so coldly at her. She felt tiny and out of place, like her rumpled, dripping umbrella, at the entrance of a temple.
This is my favourite part because you really read a sense of danger and crushing silent power emanating from the TARDIS -which I think was lacking in the Journey episode. So I'm tremendously glad you wrote it. Not only a magic box, she is something powerful, thus dangerous, we seem to forget that. It is as a mute and impossible box that the TARDIS is most threatening, not as a mystery. She is a sentient ship, an inhabited, haunted vessel, like, as you wrote, a temple. There is a presence and essence within those walls and THIS is more terrifying than zombies in corridors... Inside the TARDIS, Clara seems to feel pressed, because she is, as her umbrella, folded to fit in what is essentially another dimension. And Clara feels it because of what she is? (I want the finale now)
The wheels of fate, turning.
Oh, I really like that image, especially after Journey to the Centre of the TARDIS... Something/someone is pulling the strings and the plan is huge. And Clara a wheel...
The description of the Doctor's limbs surprinsingly falling into place in the TARDIS was extremely accurate because for all his power and intelligence he still is an alien and his body language betrays him as much as his time machine.
You also encapsulated so well Clara's general reaction to the Doctor when you say 'she could have smiled' but didn't. That's what I adore about Clara, she's much, much warier of him than any companion -frankly I would be. Obviously the way he acts around her is weird and she senses it. She's right to act as if she is tested constantly; she puts on a face for him. At the end of the day, she always comes back home because she sees she doesn't belong with him - no 'but I was going to be with you forever' which is cute but a bit unrealistic considering all of them know he is an ageless alien. We discussed it before, it doesn't mean he lives his relationships in a superficial way -well, a bit, but he has to protect himself, he is no Knulp-, it is to him short, but intense.
Oh, the metaphor of the cat with time claws, delicious, absolutely. Because cats, more than any other pets, seem to tolerate us rather than live with us -'peasant, I shall share this part of my sofa only because you take so much place'. The TARDIS similarly acts with everybody including the Doctor. And I think you may just have hit the nail on the head with 'those lights flashed accusing'. The TARDIS knows who Clara is, something worse than Jack who was a walking time anomaly, yet she is not aggressive, she doesn't want to kill Clara, she seems to resent her. We'll see, soon...
Of course, smart girl, Clara would see it as jealousy on her part, she sensed how 'alive' the TARDIS is.
Loved the ending, it fell like and axe. Accused: Clara. Verdict: guilty. Sentence: Guillotine.
It was extremely insightful. I love gap-fillers and this one is really good and tickles the mind when it comes to finding who is Clara... On the threshold, between the lines, but right on the spot. It is as good as meta ;)