EEEE this is fantastic! Best use of hallucinogenic lipstick! Loving your Clara -- especially the way you describe her mannerisms. And River and Eleven are bantering perfectly -- River switching lightning fast between Annoyed with him and Reassuring with Clara was great... really liked the way it paralleled the way she talked over him to Amy, except with more flirtiness, which... yay, totes would happen. The whole read-between-the-lines conversation River and the Doctor are having (It was your place to tell her!) is super interesting too. So fabulous and :D!